How is this excerpt.....?

Not bad. I'm more curious about how Andrew is feeling about it in the beginning here. It's good, but since I'm coming into the middle of it, I'm not sure how to imagine the dead body or what happened to him. It's intriguing though, so you do have a good start. The sentence 'Andrew was sure that...' seems out of place somehow, but it could be because I don't know Clancy and 'positively darling' seems like something a woman or a gay man would say. Again it could be because I don't know the character. Then in the end, I like that Andrew's helping bury him but at the moment it gives an image of men covering his body and leaving his head for Andrew. The last sentence runs on a bit too, you could break it up a little. Just my thoughts as I read it. Nice job though, keep it up!